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songs in sleep by ~akai-hanabi:iconakai-hanabi:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


The sun has gone, along with the faded horizon
Half the world's shadows have disappeared
Those left behind wander around like cats sans tails
And the other half disturbed by the shadow-less
Protect the remaining shadows by clinging to the dark,
Marking their territory and barking hoarsely,
Chasing driver-less, flesh coloured cars
With hairy roofs and wobbly, rubbery paint jobs
Polluting the air with the fumes of factories
The founding father trees wither, shrink and die,
As all the water is used to fuel the cars,
They fall away as the ground crumbles below them
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Author's Comments

i thought about calling this: a song about the beginning of the end of the world. but i decided against it for several reasons
1) it's cliched (well current title is still cliched... meh)
2) it doesn't actually have a distinct rhythm when i think about it
3) the title was just too long

yeah... quite possibly, whatever you think this poem is about, it probably isn't...

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~FerengCheng May 25, 2007, 8:26:15 PM
I like this one too. It's so left of centre.

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~akai-hanabi May 25, 2007, 8:59:14 PM
:bounce: i love how i wrote this so quickly. yay for dreams! thanks =D i was listening to jack johnson and red hot chili peppers at the time and i couldn't get the image of people turning into cats, dogs and cars out of my head

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~FerengCheng May 26, 2007, 9:42:12 PM
o.0

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~akai-hanabi May 27, 2007, 2:16:09 AM
yeah... that

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~batousaijin Jun 22, 2007, 9:51:15 PM
i can feel an apocalyptic vibe in it. whatever it's about, it probably would do well as a metaphor for the end of the world.

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~ClaudiaCasanova Jun 23, 2007, 7:49:53 AM
I like the concepts you brought up in this poem. Beuatiful imagry, as well.:heart:

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~akai-hanabi Jun 23, 2007, 3:31:42 PM
yes, that's true. to be honest, i can't remember exactly what i had in mind while i wrote this =D

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~akai-hanabi Jun 23, 2007, 3:33:30 PM
Thank you =) do you think there's anyway i could improve this?

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~ShyScarlett Jul 1, 2007, 6:11:19 AM
Wow, a very interesting poem! It sure did get me thinking, and there are some really strong images in there. My favourite line is "Those left behind wander around like cats sans tails". Great job! :)
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